Patric D'Eimon
09-01-2003, 11:58 PM
David Kalmusky wrote:
> Please, Please, do NOT....
>
> .....don't say you don't like the girls voice, you don't like the
> song, that there is too much stuff going on, or not enough stuff,
> it's too sparce etc.....
>
> Those are Production details, which I am NOT looking for a critique
> on.
>
> <SNIP>
> All sonic thoughts, critiques, praise, dislikes, and advice are
> welcome.
>
Those thoughts seem to be contradictory but at any rate... I think you
have a terrific mix. I like the girls voice. Why so many disclaimers.
Country music is just as valid as any other music mushy or not. Let's
see some back bone. My system has everything about in the right place
and it sounds nice. Here's the stuff you said you don't want. I think
you need a stronger statement/melody in the intro. The fiddle or the
pedal or even the wurli would be nice to hear it stronger. At the "b"
part of the 1st verse you lose the singer and the story she is singing.
From "I thought by now" to "anticipating" is unclear like you are trying
to hide the lyrics. This treatment reminds me of Shelby Lynne's "I Lie
Myself To Sleep" on Tough All Over. Only I can always follow Shelby's
words and the song story.
I also think that in the chorus you need to pull the hi hat pattern up
to 16th notes where you do the staccato figure. My ears just want to
hear something more intense and pushy there. Maybe not the HH but
something needed to happen there. Maybe a counter BG layer or
something. Also in the 1/2 chorus that serves as a bridge it would be
nice to have a quicker pulse for just a few bars where it's staccato.
Last...I wanted to hear a full chorus again at the end. I wasn't done
with the song where you ended it. I wanted it to take me farther. If
I'm going to invest my attention in your song I was my full moneys
worth. Don't go skipping out early. That's about it. I like the voice
alot. Sounds alot like Shelby Lynne.
Patric
> Please, Please, do NOT....
>
> .....don't say you don't like the girls voice, you don't like the
> song, that there is too much stuff going on, or not enough stuff,
> it's too sparce etc.....
>
> Those are Production details, which I am NOT looking for a critique
> on.
>
> <SNIP>
> All sonic thoughts, critiques, praise, dislikes, and advice are
> welcome.
>
Those thoughts seem to be contradictory but at any rate... I think you
have a terrific mix. I like the girls voice. Why so many disclaimers.
Country music is just as valid as any other music mushy or not. Let's
see some back bone. My system has everything about in the right place
and it sounds nice. Here's the stuff you said you don't want. I think
you need a stronger statement/melody in the intro. The fiddle or the
pedal or even the wurli would be nice to hear it stronger. At the "b"
part of the 1st verse you lose the singer and the story she is singing.
From "I thought by now" to "anticipating" is unclear like you are trying
to hide the lyrics. This treatment reminds me of Shelby Lynne's "I Lie
Myself To Sleep" on Tough All Over. Only I can always follow Shelby's
words and the song story.
I also think that in the chorus you need to pull the hi hat pattern up
to 16th notes where you do the staccato figure. My ears just want to
hear something more intense and pushy there. Maybe not the HH but
something needed to happen there. Maybe a counter BG layer or
something. Also in the 1/2 chorus that serves as a bridge it would be
nice to have a quicker pulse for just a few bars where it's staccato.
Last...I wanted to hear a full chorus again at the end. I wasn't done
with the song where you ended it. I wanted it to take me farther. If
I'm going to invest my attention in your song I was my full moneys
worth. Don't go skipping out early. That's about it. I like the voice
alot. Sounds alot like Shelby Lynne.
Patric